I like it at first, but it gor boring and forgetful real quick.
It's the repetition, i hear no variety or change, and the little instrument changes and adds you do, end up being repeated also!
I did like the Caribbean feel of the drums and it has this great energy that fits perfectly on a platformer.
some variety would make this better, on the drums, or the instruments you use, or the note progression of the line. or u can just shorten it a minute or two.
mixing seems okay, drums are too much in the foreground, and overall, it's nice to listen to.
I hear you. I wouldn't mind remixing this one. I like the general melody, but it does need to be broken up into different parts and frankensteined into another creation.
Thank you for the review @AlexTL13.
I feel this song as the emotions and thoughts of a protagonist, as he follows/spies on individuals that can best be described as dangerous.
the... cellos? tubas?... low notes, keep a feeling of tension and mystery, the rest of the instruments giving that classic noir goodness. The keys in the middle of the sounds keeping the atmosphere consistent enough for the blunt transition to work.
The transition is as if the protagonist was knocked out, bringing a flashback of him and a lover. The details are fuzzy, but it's mostly beauty and romance, some notes bringing a sense of fading.
The low notes are pretty much gone taking with it the other instruments and with them the noir. The thin strings keeps a dreamy quality that always entrances me no matter where I hear it. (I got to learn how to do that.) Bu this dreamlike atmosphere feels like the song reached an intermission, and by 2:36 the soft quality begins to tire me out, like it's wasting time, "is this intermission going to be solved" is probably the words that fit the reason why i thought that.
At that moment, 2:36, I feel some instruments should die out or get softer, so it feels like it's coming to a close instead of feeling like it extends its welcome and shows overindulgence in the Mile Davis inspired smoothness of the part. Then again, I gave a specific number, but that's just me saying that it feels too long, but just a tiny bit. Maybe it'll make the slight disappointment of knowing it'll never go back to the first half naturally happen in more of a "oh, it's done" instead of "how long is this song?"
It's a weird tradeoff, but i like the decision of making the experience somewhat inconclusive and the thing about such a decision is that it'll always be a mixed bag where opinions will be all over the place. my opinion, i think all this needs is a bit of trimming.
I didn't say anything about the beginning because i have no clue on how to change it so it melds together with the other half with more than one instrument. I'll leave that to your judgement.
Mixing wise it sounds very nice to me (though I'm using laptop speakers)
aannnd yea Sorry if I couldn't help with anything more specific.
Hey! Thanks a ton for your long and detailed review. I like your story ;) I feel what you mean if you say it´s too long. The problem might be that it extremely slows down after the climax. I think to trim it might be an issue since the progression is not finished and that would mean a completely new arrangement... Maybe it could be an idea to bring the slow part first and afterwards doing the climax thingy. That would destroy the story I had in my mind but maybe it´ll serve the song.
It starts out wonderfully dark and smooth. But by the halfway point it started to loose me. There's a point by 1:37 where it calms down, but then this line comes up that i feel makes the dark theme rather overblown and this goes on almost till the end. Where the sound disappears and it returns to the groove it had going for at the beginning.
This overblown bit is not only the somewhat loud instrument used, to me it's the two chord progressions it loops on. Where the dissonance and the eerie silence of most of the background instruments comes off as a somewhat childish bit of crazy "I'm am going SO crazy, OH MAN, all the murders will happen soon if nobody STOPS ME"
This could have been avoided if there was something to support the lone instrument but when that happens it becomes even more "crazy" which is what took me out of the song in the first place.
It seems to be part of a progression you were going for were things get bigger and bigger where the crowd pulses, when the song actually just needed to take a ride down the creepy alleyways and let the victim just come along.
Sweet mixing and mastering by the way.
I enjoyed it, it's such a happy tune couldn't help but have a smile.
But the mix in this thing is loud to a painful degree. The instrument that hurts me changes as the song goes along, sometimes it's the main melody, other times it's the cymbals, and by the end those ending noises on my right made me think the speaker was gonna break.
Of course, I could be exaggerating a bit, but I'm just giving you honest thoughts as i listened to it. luckily technology gave me the power to control the volume. with the volume low and short length it doesn't annoy me enough to give it too low a score.
The track had me thinking of a mysterious forest, the white noise feeling like the rustling of the trees moved by the wind.
I felt bored in the first half of the song, it mostly came from the main instrument in the foreground for which the repetition held a presence that failed to keep my attention. I felt like it was overpowering the smaller noise in the back and the minimalist approach started to show itself as somewhat shallow.
The thin white noise is what held it together and what let me keep listening especially since it progresses a bit louder as it goes on, this subtle progression gave it that bit of fullness it needed to get me in the mood.
overall i like it.
It's okay if you thought the melody was a bit hollow. The point of the song is to feel somewhat empty.
The detail you describe definitely gives me the impression that the magic I had been weaving was starting to take effect. Perhaps this song will grow on you if you give it a few more listens.
Ultimately, I hope you will give the rest of the album a listen too. I'd like to hear your thoughts on the other tracks.
Oh jeez i really like this. It's too short, but that's because I'm used to hearing music like this with a length of minimum 6 minutes hehe. so yea, I'm not very knowledgeable so i can't say much more than that I loved it and thank you for the 2 minutes 44 seconds.
I think you're right. Part of this sleep facing west project was about writing quickly and moving on without overthinking things, but I do feel that this is too short. I've resumed work on it.
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